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30 Scripts in 30 Days: Part 3

1/24/2022

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Missed what's going on? Check out Part 1 or Part 2.
Throughout this challenge, I’ve discovered that my favorite time to read is while flying, and lucky for me, it’s the holidays, and I have family all across the country, which means plenty of flying. Depending on the length of the flight (and what I’m reading), I can knock out 2-3 scripts per flight. Mainly because I’m a captive audience and because the alternative would be active procrastination, which would be watching movies to avoid doing the work.
 
The first 10-scripts I read were well-known and produced screenplays for the most part. However, as I enter the halfway mark of the challenge, I’m opening the doors to more screenplays from unproduced writers from around Twitter and in the Writer’s Café (shameless plug). When I’m reading a script from an up-and-coming writer, I always try to provide feedback, so for me, this is where I slowed down the most on the challenge. So you read the Script, collect your thoughts, give the notes, succumb to creative drain, wait four days, go again.
 
The following ten scripts are also where I realized I might not finish all 30 scripts in precisely 30 days. But, not to be deterred, I kept my head down and plowed ahead, starting with some popular shows that many of you may be familiar with:
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11. Barry (ep205) - written by Alec Berg & Bill Hader

-- If y’all are fans of Barry, then you’ve seen the episode where Barry is tasked with assassinating a Taekwondo champion and his daughter. This episode drew a lot of attention for being a bit of a non-sequitur within the series, and it is a fun episode. The biggest takeaway is the way the fights are written/or not written. The writer leaves a lot to the imagination of the stunt coordinator, and this dark comedy episode comes in at just 22 pages.

12. Maniac (pilot) - written by Patrick Somerville

-- I watched this show a few years ago, and I thought it was a fantastic presentation of a sci-fi show about depression and connection. It was intimate, confusing, and introspective. However, the pilot script only does part of this. The script is confusing, even for a sci-fi that follows a character dealing with depression. It presents our protagonist Owen, as a down on his luck New Yorker, who not only feels alone but is suffocatingly lonely. No one hears him or even pays attention to him as he moves through life. The modern era is an overwhelming cacophony of noise and technology, but while the script has some good world-building, I wasn’t left with a sense of where this story was going next or what I could expect from this series.

13. The Lobster (feature) - written by Yorgos Lanthimos & Efthimis Filippou 

-- This script is so extraordinary. I’ve heard most stories by Yorgos Lanthimos are unusual, but it’s so refreshing to read a script that doesn’t fall into any pre-prescribed style. The world is incredibly unique, the conversation is intentionally flat, and the consequences are always life or death. It’s a love story crafted in an apathetic world where everyone is desperate to find someone but terrified to open up to them. (FYI, the way action blocks are formatted are absolutely massive).
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14. Seldon Seen (pilot) by Peter Feuchtwanger

-- This script was a lot of fun. The witty comedic style was fast-paced and full of keen insight, very reminiscent of Scrubs and Malcolm in the middle episodes. I enjoyed Selden’s narration and ability to break the fourth wall in a way that felt complimentary to the story. For the most part, the story was a heartfelt meet cute and could easily be seen as a series in addition to a feature

15. Boomerang (short) - written by Rylee Ebson

Not based on either the show or the movie, Boomerang is a COVID story about a family trapped in a pandemic, dealing with many personal problems, including the daughter’s need for (physical) connection and the mom coming out gay in her 60’s. My biggest takeaway from this was something I tell a lot of early writers, be careful not to retread information that the audience or characters already know. If we see something crazy happen, and the character needs to tell their best friend, assume they’ve already discussed the crazy situation. Now tell us How they are dealing with it.

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Silent Women (pilot) - written by Christine Garver

-- Silent Women was a fantastic read filled with sharp, witty dialogue, fast-paced action, and poignantly motivated scenes! It’s a story that takes us back to 1915’s Hollywood. It’s a story that knows what it is and circumvents many of the gender inequalities that you might expect while giving you a behind-the-scenes look at what it takes to make a movie (back in the day). I would absolutely watch this show.

17. Vigilante (feature) - written by Mark Mapes

-- I love diving into the superhero genre and seeing what new stories are being told. Vigilante is a return to the gritty world of disenfranchised heroes similar to 'The Boys" and "'Invincible'. It’s a fun action, packed, and does a great job showing us a world where everyone is out for themselves.
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18. Hell Bent (pilot) - written by Mimi Collins

-- It is a tight, action-comedy that closely follows Satan’s return to Earth and rediscovering his love for the stage. I won’t go into more detail since she wants to keep it off the radar, but it was a quick, entertaining read!

19. The Neighbors Across the Lake (short) - written by C.J. Greene

-- Reading this is a bit of a cheat since this is a short story, but I’ve read so many features that I’ll allow it. I always enjoy stories like this that take a well-known property and build a story from somewhere else in the world (or, in this case, the neighborhood). This short follows an Elderly couple watching the final Avengers battle with Thanos... and then having to defend themselves as some of the enemies make their way over. It was concise, funny, and very in line with everything we know about his universe without actually introducing any heroes.

20. Dickinson (pilot) - written by Alena Smith

-- If you’ve seen the apple TV+ show, then you’ll know that it moves pretty quickly. The Comedy is modern; the drama is period-appropriate (a woman must be a housewife*), but I enjoyed most about it how the Script is relatively light on scene description. Once they introduce you to the world and characters, most of the writing is spent in dialog and emotion. (And a few producer-specific notes.
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Am I getting too GIF heavy? I don't know, but I also don't care. In here I am all powerful and gifs are my one true vice.

20 scripts in, 10 to go. 

​Until next time in Part 4. 
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30 Scripts in 30 Days: Part 2

1/17/2022

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So, if you read Part 1, you know why I'm here, and you're probably wondering why the delay. Why would I break up the post and retain such pertinent details like the scripts I read? The only explanation for this is that I'm lazy. Writing several small posts rather than one big post is a more manageable undertaking.

The single most significant piece of advice I can give someone before diving into a challenge like 30 Scripts in 30 Days is to plan out what you're going to read ahead of time. I had a rough idea of what I wanted to read, and I figured I would read 10 Feature Films, 10 TV Shows, and 10 Peer Scripts. I did keep reasonably close to this format, but there were a couple of things that I didn't take into account. First, SOME SCRIPTS ARE TOO DAMN LONG. 

As a writer, I tend to split the page with an equal amount of dialog to action lines, but some scripts are only action or only dialogue. This technique is fine so long as I can follow along and have a clear sense of what the characters are doing within a scene. For example, Craig Mazin's 'Chernobyl' does a great job of moving the story forward while having little to no dialog throughout most of the story. At the same time, Alena Smith's 'Dickinson' sucks the reader into the world through its unique use of anachronistic dialog.

Whatever you're writing, know who your audience is, have a sense of how comparable scripts are written, and most importantly, keep the story moving! I started my 30-day challenge at a breakneck speed. I had several cross-country flights and managed to read 2 - 3 scripts per flight. So naturally, I wanted to choose pieces that had a similar tone to my current works in progress, but I was open to reading scripts that come highly recommended.

And without further ado, below are the first 10-scripts of my 30-day challenge.
​(I'll try to include links to any script that I'm allowed to share)
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1. The Expanse (pilot) – written by Mark Fergus and Hawk Ostby

--  “The Expanse” was awesome! It’s tense, comedic, action packed, and dense with brilliant character and world descriptions. I’m seriously going to mine this for pacing, tone, and character introductions.

2. Mare of Easttown (pilot) – written by Brad Ingelsby

--  This is a pilot that largely consists of character building. Establishing Easttown as one of America’s many small towns where dreams go to die. They do a great job of establishing all the important characters in and around Mare’s life, but if I were to take one thing away from this, it would be how to build a 60-page mystery without revealing a single clue. This episode isn’t about Mare saving the day, so much as it is about a town where a lot of shitty stuff happens, and what will it take to break people out of their molds.

3. The Handmaids Tale (pilot) – written by Ilene Chaiken

--  I was actually surprised by how short this script was for all the world building they have to do and for the dramatic tone (only 49 pages). Another show I haven’t seen, but the script is fast paced, tense, and FULL of Flashbacks. It’s a bit disorienting with how quickly they throw you into each new flashback, sometimes without returning to the main story, but it’s an interesting choice to focus on so much of the protags past rather than devolving more of this dystopian world.

4. The Chilling Adventures of Sabrina (pilot) – written by Roberto Aguirre-Sacasa

--  In an effort to bring my “spirits” up Sabrina was a fun change of pace! Empowering, driven and very proactive, Sabrina is constantly driving her story and the lives of those around her by asking why all of the time, and choosing to do something when she doesn’t get the answers she’s expecting

5. Euphoria (pilot) – written by Sam Levinson

--  It was an absolute trip (pun intended). Like pretty much the whole story is a depressing peek into the lives of a handful of high schoolers, but they present it in a way that’s unexpectedly optimistic. It’s violent, drug fueled, and hyper sexual, but it doesn’t feel like shock value so much as it appears in a hyperbolic way. Their lives are in a place where each moment feels white hot, but with so much happening it almost feels normal and expected.
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6. The Boys (pilot) – written by Eric Kripke

--  My biggest take away from the boys was it’s narrative voice was incredibly conversational as if the audience was supposed to be in the Writers Room. I really like the show, but I don’t think all of the asides (“really, who the hell is this guy”) added to the story or the read, and as much as I wanted to like them, the felt more distracting than anything else. The story pacing is told in a way that is constantly jumping from character to character rather than following one person for multiple scenes. But they do a great job of showing the gritty behind the scenes of superheroes

7. Chernobyl (pilot) – written by Craig Mazin

--  I've fallen a bit behind on my reads, but going to do my damndest to catch up! Chernobyl is an awesome read and probably one of the more uniquely told stories that i've come across lately. I think my biggest takeaway is that the majority of the script is written as action, and as @AnnaK pointed out, it feels like it is being told by a feature writer giving direction to the art and design teams. There is so much detail in this story that I feel most would be told that it is slowing their story down. However, Chernobyl conveys a great sense of urgency and emotion. The writer ends almost every scene on an emotional note, which carries the reader forward anxious to know what's next.

8. Jessica Jones (pilot) – written by Melissa Rosenberg

--  If you watched the show a few years back, then you'll know this is a darker show with a complex protagonist who comes off as cold, erratic, and volatile. What I like about the pilot is that as the story progresses, which each clue she discovers, her armor cracks little by little and you learn that her emotional barriers are there to protect her and those closest to her. I chose this as a character study to read women characters who don't fall into prototypical roles, and Jessica Jones is anything but.

9. Adversaries (pilot) - written by Sean Finnegan, David Daitch, and Katie Stone

--  Action packed TV Drama - Naval fighter story in the vein of Top Gun, but this time it's focused on command. The shift is to a female commander's first 36 hours on the job and she's responsible for evaluating her students for real life warfare. I had certain expectations for where this was going to go and I was surprised when it didn't. It really kept things grounded on her life in the office and at home with a couple of fun Dogfights thrown in to keep the heart racing.

10. American Infamy – written by Takeo Hori

--  This script was an incredible read and I'm so excited that it placed as a Nicholls finalist. The writer does a great job of following a Japanese-American family during the trials of WW2 internment, and constantly asking what it takes to be accepted as an American. The script is heart wrenching, frustrating, and ultimately thought provoking. At a time when discrimination is ever present it's also incredibly relevant. 
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And that is 10 scripts down! I know I'm writing all of this after the fact, but where is the sense of danger if I were to release it all at once?? So I'm going to take a pause, refill my coffee and get back to rewriting this script.

​Stay tuned for PART 3 which should be dropping any...day...now.
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30 Scripts in 30 Days: Part 1

1/17/2022

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In 2010, when I first moved to Los Angeles, I had no idea that I wanted to be a screenwriter. I was here for college. That being said, I’ve always loved movies and TV, so of course, I worked on a couple short films and auditioned with the rest of the Hollywood hopefuls. Still, as mentioned, there was no immediate sense of becoming a writer.
 
Being in college and needing a fresh supply of delicious ramen, I came to the realization that I would need to make some money. I needed a job. UCLA had a job board to help students navigate the overwhelming task of finding employment in LA. Lucky for me, I managed to nab a gig as a script reader for Ari Shankar’s independent script financing company, 1984 Films. It was here that I discovered a love for the craft of screenwriting.  
 
1984 Films required me to read three to four feature-length scripts every day! For the uninformed, a feature-length script usually runs between 90 and 120 pages and can take three hours to read. I wouldn’t call myself a particularly slow reader, but I get caught up in the story. I like to remember every scrap of detail the writer gives me, and in doing so, perhaps I don’t fly through the pages as quickly as most. After reading a script, the company required me to write a two-paragraph summary of the story and provide my thoughts on whether the company should help finance the movie.
 
Looking back, this gives a lot of power to a new reader pretty inexperienced with Hollywood. Still, I absorbed so much throughout this experience. Throughout my 3-months of summer employment, I read close to 150 screenplays. Subconsciously, I learned screenplay formatting, story pacing, character development, and so-so-SO MUCH MORE.
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I believe that if you want to write screenplays, you need to read screenplays. Read the bad, read the good; read famous scripts, read scripts from your peers; read every genre, and read every type of writer. This is the best way to not only learn how to write, but you’ll learn how to write well.
 
THIS takes me to the whole point of this post. November is a big month for prose writers because an overwhelming number of them participate in a challenge known as NaNoWriMo (National Novelists Writers Month), with the goal to write a crap ton of pages in 30 days. Unfortunately, writing screenplays is a little different, so the many screenwriters who want to participate, find themselves at a loss for measuring their progress. So, I decided to join a little differently.
 
In November, I assigned myself the task of reading 30 scripts in 30 days. I’ve clearly done it before, as proven in my previous job, but I haven’t done it in a long while. So, this is an attempt to prove to myself that I have a somewhat structured approach to writing and can meet my own challenges.
 
Plot twist – I did not hit my goal.

But in PART 2, I’ll review the scripts and why the hell it’s taken so long.
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